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Old 10-03-2008
 
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Default "Through You"


As I force your knees to the ground
And you fear the moments that follow

Your eyes tell stories but you make no sound
And your mind seems evermore so shallow



Waste.
A definition for you
Hate.
Your judgment is due

Something I never had
Was given to you
Yet you cast it aside
Another sin that follows through



Your perception of life itself is flawed
And yes, I am allowed to make that call

Because unlike yourself
Deep I had to delve

Far I had to crawl
To become what I am now

A shadow of myself
After all the times I had to bow



See.
A new version of me
Flee.
For now I am set free

Something I never had
Was given to you
Yet you cast it aside
Another sin that follows through



And then disillusion will commence
As reality becomes clear
Your world shall soon collapse
And the burden
Will be yours to bear



Grasp.
How your life was before
Trapped.
'Cause you are no more

Something I never had
Was given to you
Yet you cast it aside
Another sin that follows through

Through you...
Through you...
Through you...



 

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Ultimately this would be a song.

Comments and criticism appreciated. Writing - songs in particular - appeals to me and I'd like to see what I can do.

So yeah, what did you think?
 
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Old 10-06-2008
 
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Ultimately if this were a death metal song it would be very good.
 
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Ultimately if this were a death metal song it would be very good.
Yeah that was the plan. I probably should have mentioned that.
 
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