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Old 07-03-2008
 
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A man filled with rage
No forces could cage
His deeds were widespread and cruel
He felt no remorse
Wrath his trekken course
Wise men labeled him a fool

Women bore his young
In one instance a son
His mother called the bastard Hate
A raped girl in jail
Birthed a child female
Blind infant known only as Fate

The two sought their sire
Skilled hunters for hire
His blood would fall as the rain
And end him as one
Make sure the deed done
He would pay the price for their pain

At last discovered
His sins uncovered
Daughter and son never knew
Dying for his crimes
His words etched in time
My greatest regret was you
 

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Old 07-04-2008
 
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Heh, pretty good.
 
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Old 07-09-2008
 
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I dont know why but I keep getting the feeling of epicness..This is probably the only poetry I love.

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Old 07-11-2008
 
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Climbing high mountaintops
Peaks dipped in white snow
Swimming in deep oceans
Where all rivers flow
Walking through tall forests
Green leaves on lush trees
Travel barren desert
Dust of ancient seas
Walking 'round the graveyard
Tombs made out of stone
Braving arctic wasteland
Chills down to the bone
Wherever you may go
What great wonders shown
All fail to endure
If you travel alone

3. This was originally going to be in Leviathan, but abandoned that project:

Poor, simple mankind
In hubris and in greed
Broke the locks set to bind
What should not be freed

Woe to all of your kind
Witness to this creed
Flesh and bone shall it grind
Till earth itself bleed

4.
Perfect dark fills the freezing hall
Little girl squeezes a tiny doll
Tightly wrapped up in crimson shawl

In tunnel carved from ancient stone
Loosen threads in poor stitches sewn
Noticed on doll she solely owns

Distant rats their holes scurry through
Presence the young girl never knew
Nightmares she haves are seldom few

Intense fear in her widened eyes
Shadow on the wall slowly writhes
Darkness not her own deeply sighs

Acid voice dark as midnight black
Heartache feels the flesh crawling back
Hopeless words all real meaning lack

Stolen doll torn with nothing said
Little heart filled with hopeless dread
Twisting it rips off tiny head

Monster.
 

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Old 07-17-2008
 
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I really like these. No meter or rhyme scheme though =/

Thought I'd contribute one on the same theme, if you don't mind. meter is Iambic, rhyme scheme is A B A B C D E C D E

Ode to a Dying World

Quiet now, the struggling’s finally done
Streets drenched in gore, the bodies of men strewn
The age of man, over soon as begun
Cities lie in ruins, buildings slowly swoon
No sign, no breath from God or any other
The sun slowly sets on a perished world.
Red mist, in the air lingering blood hangs
Of this ignoble end there was no auger
Children sobbed when fire from th’sky unfurled
An explosion some ways off, Earth’s death pangs.



 

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Old 07-27-2008
 
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5.
Little do you understand
Tending fields of silken blight
Portions of unholy land
Consumed by an endless night
Broken slaves of bitter odds
Damned before the second day
Waiting for some fallen gods
Nightmares all to cast away
 
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Old 07-28-2008
 
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Reading those poems I find your avatar strangely fitting. What I like most though about your poems they start out 'alive' and end 'dead'.
 
 

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